Government plans to construct an airport in your locality. Write a letter to the authority. - Explain where you came to know about the news. - Describe the negative effects of airport construction. - Ask to consider alternate sits for the airport construction.

Dear Mr Pell, I am writing to express my thoughts on the construction of the new airport in the central city, close to Beauty Garden. I would really appreciate it if you reconsider it
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some reasons. I came across the videos on a news channel on YouTube
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I was exploring it. At
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I was very surprised since it is truly a great initiative by the
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as everyone has been hoping to see it in the future.
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, I believe that our place is not suitable because of some issues which need to be considered before it is set up. There are two large nursing homes, one of which was recently completed
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the area's peaceful and quiet environment, building these homes was the best approach by the state authority. It would be highly disturbing for seniors because of the planes' and public noise.
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, it would not allow students to concentrate on studies since the school and college are nearby. I would be highly grateful to you if you consider the site called Orleans , which is not too far from here.
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not too far from the countryside , and a wide space is more suitable
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a spacious airport. I look forward to hearing your response. Thank you so much, Yours faithfully, Ann

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coherence overall
The letter follows a clear plan: opening, message about news, plus a note on problems and a request. Some paragraphs mix more than one idea. Try to keep one main idea per paragraph.
greeting and closing
The greeting and the closing are present and formal. Keep this form in future letters.
language use
Some sentences are long or wordy. Use short, clear sentences with common words.
task achievement
Give a bit more detail for each point and be sure to name the site you want as an alternative with a simple reason.
language accuracy
Check small mistakes like 'plane's' versus 'planes' and keep a calm, polite tone throughout.
tone and structure
Clear aim and polite tone throughout the letter.
content strength
You state a real point: noise and effect on nearby homes and schools.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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