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some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environment should no longer exist in 21st century.Do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st century, there should not be any man-made environment like
zoos
 for
animals
. I strongly agree with
this
 point as there are many disadvantages for
animals
 living in
zoos
.
This
 essay discusses on what are disadvantages of
zoos
 and why
animals
 should be in their natural habitats.
Firstly
,
zoos
 are man-made environments for
animals
 which does not provide freedom to
animals
 as they get in their natural habitats.
Secondly
, these
zoos
 are used for entertainment purposes. People come and enjoy viewing the
animals
. For
this
 purpose, sometimes
animals
 are tamed brutally so they lose their wildness and go soft.
This
 is a very cruel act to perform on
animals
.
Furthermore
, these man-made environments may not provide sufficient food to the
animals
 which they get naturally in
forests
.
On the other hand
, living in their own natural habitats like
forests
,
animals
 are free to move from one place to another. They get proper food and
this
 maintains a balance in the ecological system. The natural process of hunting maintains a standard balance in
the
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nature.
Forests
 provide all kinds of resources to
animals
 and they are not subjected to any kinds of cruelty by people. In conclusion, It is always better for
animals
 to stay in
forests
 than living in
zoos
. So governments need to spend more money on improving conditions for
animals
 in
forests
 than spending money on
zoos
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethical considerations
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Artificial habitats
  • Species preservation
  • Breeding programs
  • Animal welfare
  • Ecological awareness
  • Habitat destruction
  • Captive breeding
  • Educational outreach
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Psychological stress
  • Regulatory compliance
  • Domestication vs. wildness
  • Natural behavior
  • Economic viability
  • Tourist attractions
  • Cultural perspective
  • Public sentiment
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