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In modern societies more and more people choose to live on their own . what are the reasons people choose to this . It is positive or negative trend.?

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IN today's world
people
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are prefer
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 to live alone as they feel independent .The roots of joint family become weak day by day .In my points of
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this
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 is a negative trend and may create
a lots
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 of problems in future. The
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 and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
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due to
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higher
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 education and employment some
people
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 choose to live on their own .
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, in
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way
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people
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 learn about
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 and work responsibility. The
people
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 who live outside
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home
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they
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become strong .
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, when they
live
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own
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 their own they do all the activities , which is not possible at
home
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. There are zero restrictions when
people
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 live alone , they can do whatever they want.
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, as per the USA research those who live outside at
home
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 their confidence level was 60% more than those who lived
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home
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 with family or a partner. On the other side , there are negative points
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 , the main point is depression .
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, when
people
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 spend more time at
home
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 alone there are more chances of
the
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them
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 get bored , and
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directly
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 affects
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humans health.Apart from
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, there is
lack
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 of safety and
on
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one is there for help in daily work.
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 , students become
drug addicted
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 or become smokers .
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The Times Of India newspaper , 25%
students
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of students
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 are taking
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the drug
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drug
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 and they all live alone or with friends. In conclusion, it has become more popular
in
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 youngsters to live alone , but for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of
future
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the future
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 and
safety
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 it should not be encouraged.
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