In modern societies more and more people choose to live on their own . what are the reasons people choose to this . It is positive or negative trend.?

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people
are prefer
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to live alone as they feel independent .The roots of joint family become weak day by day .In my points of
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this
is a negative trend and may create
a lots
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of problems in future. The
first
and foremost reason to support my ideology is that
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due to
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higher
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education and employment some
people
choose to live on their own .
Furthermore
, in
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people
learn about
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and work responsibility. The
people
who live outside
home
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they
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become strong .
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, when they
live
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on
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own
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their own they do all the activities , which is not possible at
home
. There are zero restrictions when
people
live alone , they can do whatever they want.
For example
, as per the USA research those who live outside at
home
their confidence level was 60% more than those who lived
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home
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with family or a partner. On the other side , there are negative points
also
there .
Firstly
, the main point is depression .
For instance
, when
people
spend more time at
home
alone there are more chances of
the
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get bored , and
this
is
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affects
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humans health.Apart from
this
, there is
lack
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of safety and
on
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one is there for help in daily work.
In addition
, students become
drug addicted
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or become smokers .
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, as per
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The Times Of India newspaper , 25%
students
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are taking
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drug
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and they all live alone or with friends. In conclusion, it has become more popular
in
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youngsters to live alone , but for
betterment
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of
future
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and
safety
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it should not be encouraged.
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