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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too valuable to share freely. Discuss both views and your opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
This
 statement says that everyone has the right to be aware of all
information
 in scientific research, business and the academic world,
however
, some people think that it should have a price for access knowledge. On the one hand, knowledge is essential for people to develop something
such
 as cars, phones and others, so they should be given
information
 because if they have more these, it will have more evolved in our world.
For example
, in the past,
although
 mobile phones were very large in size, which they stay in a house or office, now scientists or researchers have developed dramatically to small in size as well as they can be carried on anywhere.
In addition
, in the businesses, the riches should explain why they have peaked at the best point, and they should share strategies for beginners to run their businesses, that it makes them know about their mistake and solving problems.
On the other hand
, researchers, scientists and investors have studied something which has spent the amount of time to carry out, and it might spend whole their life.
Therefore
, some
information
 should have a price for publishing and value.
Additionally
, if the investors provide their strategies for the public, the beginners or someone might be disappointed with their investment because one should be secret data for each business. To conclude, my personal opinion is that we should purchase some knowledge because we would know the value,
however
, some
information
 should be free for the development of humans.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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