In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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owner of a property has been a dream for many in my country. It brings the feeling of stability and
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to
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adult life. The idea of
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a family
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there is perhaps one of the more appealable
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for buying a house. For others, which do not have a want-to-stay mentality prefer renting. Buying can be absolutely positive
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people,
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what may be the situations in which is better buying than renting? On one hand, having been grown in a functional family in the suburbs, an adult tends to think of buying a house for his future family. Given that, he will be spending some years working and depending on the price, a loan would be required to achieve that dream.
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, he needs to take into account some factors
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as price, preserving a stable job, size, debt capacity, etc. In some cultures, people believe in acquiring something that
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its value
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time, as well.
On the other hand
, renting is an attractive option to those
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who travel continuously and whose job is not
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one single place,
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for singles. It is said that the money people spent on renting will never return again, with
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money they would pay a bank debt to become
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owner
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. To sum up, buying has more advantages,in my thought, whether the buyer is very
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and cautious about the budget, and receive some advice before requesting a loan, What is more, on the Internet or libraries there are books of what is called 'Financial intelligence'. By reading those books, the future owner can prepare a plan for the future and acquire his property knowing the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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