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In the future, it may be necessary for us to live on another planet. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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After some
centuaries
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centuries
, we may require to live on
different
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planet
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planets
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 due to the possible inhabitable conditions of the
Earth
. A few people think that
money
 should be spent on space exploration for the potential livable
planet
such
 as Mars. I believe that we should invest
money
 in finding another
planet
 which can be our home.
Hence
 I completely agree with the opinion.
This
 essay will describe my agreement. There are many possible reasons which would make us
to
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leave the
planet
Earth
.
First
 and foremost, natural
energy
 resources like oil, gas, coal are at the edge of
extinct
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. They are no longer
in sufficient
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insufficient
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 quota to
fulfill
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energy
 needs.
For example
, various surveys suggested that natural
energy
 resources will
last
 only for
next
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 10 years.
Additionally
, nowadays, the frequency of
envirionmental
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environmental
 catastrophes have increased a lot. In many places, people
suffere
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suffer
 due to Global warming, floods, and droughts. If
this
 continues to happen, we need to leave the
Earth
 soon.
On the other hand
, some people consider renewable
energy
 sources as our saviours. They believe that Solar power, Wind power, Marine power will help reduce
the
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pollution which will ultimately
rejuvinate
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rejuvenate
rejuvenated
health
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the health
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 of the
Earth
.
Hence
 they want to spend
money
in
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 making them effective. In conclusion, according to me, renewable
energy
 sources do not guarantee to make the
Earth
 livable in the future.
Hence
, we need to spend
money
 to find another
planet
 as our plan B to survive.
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