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In the future, it may be necessary for us to live on another planet. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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After some
centuaries
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centuries
, we may require to live on
different
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planet
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planets
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 due to the possible inhabitable conditions of the
Earth
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. A few people think that
money
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 should be spent on space exploration for the potential livable
planet
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such
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 as Mars. I believe that we should invest
money
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 in finding another
planet
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 which can be our home.
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 I completely agree with the opinion.
This
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 essay will describe my agreement. There are many possible reasons which would make us
to
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leave the
planet
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Earth
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.
First
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 and foremost, natural
energy
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 resources like oil, gas, coal are at the edge of
extinct
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. They are no longer
in sufficient
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insufficient
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 quota to
fulfill
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fulfil
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energy
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 needs.
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, various surveys suggested that natural
energy
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 resources will
last
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 only for
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next
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the next
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 10 years.
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, nowadays, the frequency of
envirionmental
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environmental
 catastrophes have increased a lot. In many places, people
suffere
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suffer
 due to Global warming, floods, and droughts. If
this
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 continues to happen, we need to leave the
Earth
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 soon.
On the other hand
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, some people consider renewable
energy
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 sources as our saviours. They believe that Solar power, Wind power, Marine power will help reduce
the
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pollution which will ultimately
rejuvinate
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rejuvenate
rejuvenated
health
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the health
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 of the
Earth
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.
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 they want to spend
money
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in
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 making them effective. In conclusion, according to me, renewable
energy
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 sources do not guarantee to make the
Earth
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 livable in the future.
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, we need to spend
money
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 to find another
planet
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 as our plan B to survive.
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