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Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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 number of
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 migrate to the urban regions, due to which the developed regions become more crowded and overpopulated.
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 happens because of a lack of employment.
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, various government schemes relating to birthrate can help to resolve an issue . As it is well known , that the main reason for the migration of the citizens from their native place to the
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 cities is lack of skilled oriented jobs.
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 happens because of the high salary and better lifestyle offered to the person in the cities.
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, in backward
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 not facilitated that much compare to the towns.
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, in India, due to the scarcity of
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employment in underdeveloped places. More
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 tend to move
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the region
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, there are several solutions that can be undertaken to solve the problem of overpopulation. The best way could be to control the birthrate of the citizens.
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 can be done by educating the
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 and telling them the disadvantage of having more children in their families.
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, the Chinese government issued many schemes and
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 enacted some laws in their country which reduced the problem of population in their nation. In conclusion, the main reason for migration is
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a reduction
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 in the job vacancies allotted to the
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 in their hometowns.
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, diminishing the birthrate can assist to overcome the issue of overpopulation in the towns . In the future,
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 approach could help to resolve the problem.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Migration
  • Sustainable development
  • Infrastructure
  • Population density
  • Urban sprawl
  • Urban planning
  • Renewable energy
  • Family planning
  • Rural economies
  • Public transport
  • Living standards
  • Healthcare access
  • Educational facilities
  • Employment opportunities
  • Regulations
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