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Some people say that the more a product is advertised, the more people will buy it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern days,
products
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 and
advertisements
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 often go together. It is considered by many that the increase in a
number
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 of advertisement for
products
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 enable them to be attained by most
people
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. I think, the demand for
products
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 comes down to a
number
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 of
advertisements
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 but not at all for some situations. On the one hand, the product becomes much more noticeable with
advertisements
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. Companies seek to grow their numbers. A substantial
number
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 of
people
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 encounter them anywhere
such
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 as on the billboards, on the internet or in a break of TV series; which increases the likelihood of being purchased because of drawing their attention.
Therefore
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,
this
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 results in a rise in the company’s sales.
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,
people
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 always exposed to lots of
advertisements
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 about chocolate companies tend to buy their
products
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, going to the supermarket.
On the other hand
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, companies generally opt to cooperate with talented advertisers that can generate creative works due to the fact that not only quantity of
advertisements
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 is important but
also
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 the quality of them is crucial for the sale rates. Effective
advertisements
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 have remarkably positive impacts on the consumer because
people
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 keep
products
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 in mind easily, whether being less or not; leading to more consumption of them.
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, a cringe or peculiar advertisement can become more popular among
people
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 and it can be risen up at purchasing of
products
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. In conclusion, the
number
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 of
advertisements
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 could be enough for the sales rate of
products
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. Effective ones,
however
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, sometimes can achieve their goals without paying lots of advertisement costs.
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