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Companies spend millions each year on advertising online, in magazines and billboards.These adverts can encourage people to buy products that they do not really need? What are the positive and negative effects of consumerism?

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The most effective and common method that
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companies use in order to persuade
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 to buy their products is
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advertisement.Marketing and advertising are the keys to a company's success.
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 , flashy and extravagant advertisement of goods has led to an increase in
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 where
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 buy things that are not needed.
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 has positive as well as negative effects , which will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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 is not necessarily a bad thing. It has its own advantages. One of them is that it generates job opportunities for several
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, especially for those living in developing countries.
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 is because , as the demand for a particular company's product increases, the company sets up new manufacturing units , in turn leading to the creation of new job positions.
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 , big companies like Apple are establishing their factories in developing countries like India and China.
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, there is a reduction in the problem of unemployment in these nations.
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, just like every coin has two sides,
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 has its demerits. It has given rise to a major problem associated with waste disposal. As
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 buy more and more unnecessary stuff, they
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 throw it away after a short period of time when they no longer want to keep it around .
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, a lot of waste is generated and with no facility to dispose
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it off
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, it remains in the environment causing its degradation.
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 ,
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 is highest in the U.S and
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 here produce the highest amount of waste every year which is harming their environment. To conclude, even though
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 can help to fight against unemployment by providing jobs to many
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 , its negative effects on the natural environment cannot be overlooked. I believe that
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 can be reduced if we decide to buy only necessary things and not get carried away by
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