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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, we see a dramatic change in
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 consumption habits across the world. The canned
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 has become common and more popular among people in very little
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, resulting in, fading of the conventional form of
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preparation
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. I agree with
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 statement for some reason and my position will be
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 essay. Out of all
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, the foremost one is that decrease in the members of
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the family
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, resulting in, the head of the family working hard to
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 the needs of the people. There are predominantly two significant reasons responsible for the flourishing of
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 trend in the coming years.
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, family size has reduced to nuclear or single parents family, which means adult members are busy in addressing the family challenges,
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 earning enough money to fulfil the needs of the family.
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, spending
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 on old methodology to prepare
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, which is extravagantly
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-consuming is considered
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futile and less significant.
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, in earlier days, when family size was large, a single family member was dedicated to looking after the growing and
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 of
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-consuming
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. In those days, it was economical in terms of
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 to do so.
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, these days, we find an increasing number of working mothers.
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, they face an arduous challenge to balance their work and family life, and they prefer the fastest way to prepare
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 and feed their family.
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, the processed
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 becomes their spontaneous choice, as it takes no
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 to prepare.
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, it is evident from the Times survey that 60% of working women choose the easiest and less
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-consuming way to prepare
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 due to their busy
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. Admittedly, ready to prepare
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 poses a serious threat to the existence of traditional
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 as our children are highly likely to imitate what they see, which means that conventional
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 will become obsolete. In conclusion, our
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 habit is highly influenced by the lifestyle we follow. From the above argument, I infer that the absence of dedicated
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 to prepare the
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 consumed conventional
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 and ease in
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 of the processed
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 becomes the predominant factors to choose
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convenience
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. If
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 trend continues
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 soon conventional
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 and its
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 ways will be forgotten.
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