The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There are widely differing views on the issue of whether the ultimate goal of science should be to improve human
lives
or not. While
some still hold to the conservative view, in this
essay I intend to argue that improving the Earth and animals
' lives
is necessary to guarantee a pleasurable life
for people
. The reasons for this
are as follows.
First of all, it is evident that humans
have caused exponential damage to the environment and compensating for these disadvantages is a prerequisite to a better life
. Living on the Earth and uncontrolled utilization of its valuable resources ruthlessly have brought with it such
significant challenges as an increase in greenhouse gasses and global warming, consequently
. This
undesirable phenomenon has resulted in a considerable drop in the living quality of all the people
that the majority of governments globally are struggling to control. If we wish to improve people
’s lives
, therefore
, I believe compensating for applied harm to the environment must be the first priority in scientific research.
Secondly
and even more importantly though, is improving the lives
of animals
to provide a better life
for people
. The pro-human group would argue that human issues should be preferred in scientific research as humans
are the conductors of these studies, however
, I believe that neglecting animals
in scientific studies would result in irreparable harm to humans
. Imagine the Malariya ailment that cost a majority of people
their lives
years ago. It was such
a virus that was transformed into humans
by mosquitoes that, it could have been prevented by paying adequate attention to animal issues. Equally importantly, as humans
, animals
also
have the right to enjoy a more qualified life
.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that sacrificing the Earth and animals
to improve human lives
would return to haunt humans
at a large scale. Given the seriousness of the problems it could cause, I believe that this
should be the ultimate goal in scientific research.Submitted by golriiz.azizi1991 on
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