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Art is considered an important part of society as well as expression of culture. do you think it is important for children to be taught art? do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

#art #part #society #expression #culture #children #focus #subjects
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Art
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 plays a pivotal part in
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society as well as helps in
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 of its heritage . It should be mandatory to make
young
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 generation learn about it and I think it should be taught to the children along with the other subjects. To embark on,
art
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 is expressed in many forms
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 as paintings, handicrafts, pottery, drawings , sculptures ,classical dance and so on. Any
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 rich culture is expressed by
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 only and it is very important to preserve our culture by making
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next
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 generation
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keep in touch
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 them.
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, a special form of mouth puppetry form exist in southernmost parts of India and it is losing its importance due to youngsters being not exposed to that
art
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 parents make them focus on other subjects which they think are more beneficial to set goals in future
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 of
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.
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 to it, many museums and
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 galleries are losing
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 patronage from
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 due to folks not letting their offsprings exposure to these things.
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, it is very crucial to make young people learn about
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 of our rich heritage and let them take part in all skills along with other subjects too.
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, many teenagers who go for arts in their graduation subject can certainly become a famous fashion designer in future . So equal
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 should be given to all
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 in order to balance learning in an individual.  To sum up ,
art
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 plays
indispensable
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 role in shaping and defining our society and young people should get learn its importance from
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