Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Recently, extensive attention has been put on international aid
organizations
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. Some
people
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argue that
celebrities
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can make
people
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pay attention to problems when they give a
hand
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to
organizations
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. Other
people
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believe that the problems become less critical with the
support
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from
celebrities
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. I would
support
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the former view. On one
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, one problem with famous
people
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's help is that it may mislead the public about
charity
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.
People
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may believe that only individuals with fame and fortune can give
support
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to those international aid
organizations
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.
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,
people
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are unlikely to participate in helping vulnerable groups because they think that they are not wealthy enough to provide facilities or devices for
people
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in need.
As a result
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,
people
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are not willing to contribute to a
charity
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and they will rely on
celebrities
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to give a helping
hand
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to those
organizations
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.
On the other
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hand
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, the
influence
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power of famous
people
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cannot be ignored because they have
advertisement
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effect. Those well-known
people
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can have a huge
influence
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on their fans.
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is because many fans see their idols as role models. They can learn a lot from their idols.
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, If the celebrity participates in
charity
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events
such
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as showing their
support
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to children in a developing country, their fans will be likely to give their
support
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to those children and do some volunteer jobs.
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, due to the
influence
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of those famous
people
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, more and more
people
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will join in
charity
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events. In conclusion,
although
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it may mislead the public when
celebrities
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show their supports to the international aid
organizations
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, I would argue that their
influence
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power cannot be ignored, which can make more
people
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pay attention to
charity
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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