Write about the following topic. It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. Writing task 2

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Nowadays,
technology
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is an important part
in
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one's daily
life
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. The relationship between modern
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and traditional
culture
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has been a concern for many
people
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. I believe that both should
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simultaneously.
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, the expansion of
technology
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has affected the traditional
culture
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in many ways. The development in
technology
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has made
people
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's
life
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more
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easier and has changed
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life
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the life
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of many humans, like
introduction
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the introduction
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of many kitchen appliances like
microwave
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microwaves
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,
oven
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ovens
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, instant
pot
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pots
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and so on.
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has
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transformed the ways of traditional cooking,
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in fact
people
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no longer spend time in the kitchen as they used to do before. Now
people
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have more
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the
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junk food and less
of
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the
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healthy food.
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, in
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today's
today
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scenario
children are more into
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video
games
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and less into traditional
games
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or physical
games
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like
khokho
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Kho-Kho
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, kabaddi,
giili
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girls
guilt
Gilli
danda etc. All these
indian
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Indian
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traditional
games
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are played on computers.
On the other hand
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, in
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the case
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of traditional
culture
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,
people
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in India still celebrate many festivals like
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,
diwali
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Diwali
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,
navratri
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etc. All these festivals are celebrated in most
of
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the countries like
USA
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the USA
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, Canada, UK.
This
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helps to transfer the cultural knowledge to young
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ones
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in different parts of the world.
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Furthermore
, parents or grandparents can
also
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educate
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children
childrens
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children
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about the
culture
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by telling the stories or playing different
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they used to play in their childhood. In
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way
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we can transfer the
cultral
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cultural
to other generations. In conclusion, many traditional ways of
life
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have been lost in the advancement of
technology
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, but
still
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we can follow it over the generations and flourish it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • erosion of traditional cultures
  • modern conveniences
  • neglecting traditional practices
  • cultural exchange
  • documentation
  • traditional art forms
  • global audience
  • continued relevance
  • oral histories
  • digitize ancient texts
  • cultural heritage sites
  • preservation of heritage
  • embracing modern advancements
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