Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The answer is complex since there are a lot of
choices
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and all of them are different kinds.In some
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I would say that it is avoid thing to have the ability to choose from a wide variety.Take
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example,gastronomy.Every single person has different meals on their list of favourites.
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if you have a bigger family it is almost impossible to cook something that everyone would like.
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would say that it is great that you can go to a shopping centre and choose from a
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different food types.I can always find something that looks delicious. Naturally,there are some people who say that it is against evolution.They claim to say that back in the old days we had a perfect life when technically everybody was farming.I personally disagree with that.I am happy that I could choose a job that fits best to my abilities.I mean no one is the same,why would be want to do the same?Different kinds of universities give us the opportunity to
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who
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we are meant to be.We have the right to choose.
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there is one topic where,according to my opinion,we have too many
choices
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This
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television.
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hundreds of channels,
therefore
you can always find songs
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worth watching.
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you could sit
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your sofa the whole day and watch films.I think that people doing
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outdoor activities are the result of many available channels.From
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I would agree that we have too many
choices
. In
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I would say that we cannot generally talk about
choices
since they could be different.In some
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it is
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good to have many of
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wild other areas they could have a negative effect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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