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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too valuable or too important to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While some individuals believe that it is beneficial to share as much
information
 as possible in the scientific, business and
the
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academic world, others believe that
information
that is
 too valuable or too important should not be shared freely. From my perspective,more and more
information
 should be published, but
the
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valuable and important
information
 should not. On the one hand, there are some advantages to sharing as much
information
 as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world.
Firstly
, when it comes to scientific research, articles and researches are the source of inspiration for scientists. The more
information
 about researches published, the more ideas scientists will have which will lead to more discoveries.
Moreover
, when it comes to businesses
,
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 when countries have easy access to many new products, they can better fulfil their residents` needs. They can import goods and products which do not exist in their countries.
In addition
, publishing many data about new fields and majors or new institutes let students have better chooses about their education. It is more likely for students to find a major related to their talents and passion.
On the other hand
, valuable
information
 and important data should not be published freely because of security issues. Some
information
 about people`s identity which includes address, phone, the bank account should not be shared freely because thefts will identify them easily. When people should pay a lot of money to have access to them, it is less possible that these data are identified by thefts.
Moreover
, some
information
 about the military should not be shared, because it decreases the security of countries and their enemies would understand their strategies. In conclusion, while I believe that sharing much
information
 has advantages, from my perspective because of security reasons valuable and important
information
 should not be shared freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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