Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

In today's world, due to
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rapid development of technologies, some high education institutions provide people with online courses.
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whether
this
tendency can be considered to be
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or negative.
To begin
with,
first
of all, the main advantage of
this
approach in the contemporary world is that it saves a lot of money.
this
is because of the fact that not only does the majority chose foreign educational institutions and it requires vast payments for
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but
also
some people can not afford
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to another country.
Therefore
, the opportunity of online learning
allowd
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more
studenst
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to acquire appropriate education without spending too much money.
For instance
, recent research has shown that by doing
this
humans may save on average £5,000 a year.
Moreover
, another benefit of
this
development is that it is extremely relevant in the current situation with coronavirus.
This
is due to the fact that people are able not to visit public places with a lot of crowds,
such
as universities.
hence
, it reduces
risks
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of getting affected by
coronavirus
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and so there is likely to be a reduction in cases.
For example
, one study has illustrated that in the year 2020 about 20% of Ukrainian students switched to online courses. Eventually, to conclude, there is evidence to assume that the fact that universities offer their courses on the Internet has more positive consequences.
Firstly
, it may save learners a lot of money since online studying eliminates payments for
accomodation
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and,
secondly
, it can reduce the risk of being affected by Covid-19.
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