Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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there is an opinion that total fees

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university studies are to be afforded by the learners themselves as only individuals

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having higher education and society has no advantage from that.I do not agree with

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essay is to elaborate on my opinion. To start with, I oppose the given statement because of the following reasons. Nowadays , higher educational universities have increased the term payments and if a student comes from a middle-class family he cannot afford that much of the fee.

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, he would not go for higher studies.

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he cannot apply to

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jobs where graduation is the minimum

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, many Central Government Jobs require a

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degree to apply for any post.

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, the number of employed people in public decreases.

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, If a student comes out from a college or university with a degree, he will be able to start his own business and can create jobs for others too.

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, the unemployment problem in a community gets lowered.

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student is indirectly helping the public.

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students are inclined to start their own businesses and will recruit many individuals.

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, they are serving a lot to the nation.For all these reasons, I believe that students should be helped by the Government and society for their higher studies for the economic development of a nation.

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, the essay has discussed the given situation and explained the reasons for my disagreement.

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Topic Vocabulary:

tertiary education
employability
economic growth
socioeconomic disparities
public funding
research and development
prosperity
equity in education
innovation
high earning potential
personal development
educated workforce
exacerbating
accessibility
public good
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