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Should government invest in Arts or in Public Services? To what extent do you agree?

#government #arts #services
The
government
 spends a substantial part of its budget these days, not just on public works, but
also
 on the
arts
. Though spending
money
 on public services is necessary, I don’t think spending on the
arts
 is a waste of
money
. There are many reasons that a substantial amount of the
government
 budget is spent on public services.
First
 and foremost, things like hospitals, highways, and schools, are public facilities and these things decide the quality of life that most of us will have.
For instance
, the health of our society will decline if the
government
 does not spend enough
money
 on hospitals.
Similarly
, our children will not be adequately educated if there is not enough
money
 spent on schools.
Also
, if we do not spend enough on these things, the poor in our society will be more affected.
This
 does not suggest,
however
, that the
arts
 should be entirely ignored.
To begin
 with, it is difficult for many
arts
 organizations to make a lot of profit, so many theatres and other
such
 venues will have to close without any
government
 assistance.
In addition
, the
arts
also
 have an important influence on our quality of life. Many citizens are very fond of music and theatre shows, so it is important for the
government
 to fund those organizations so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. To sum up, there are obvious advantages of ensuring that a significant amount of
money
 goes into public services and for almost all of us,
this
 affects the quality of life. That said, I don’t think spending
money
 on the
arts
 is a waste of
money
, as it
also
 offers major advantages.
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