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in the future, more people will chose to go on holiday in their home country and not travel abroad on holiday. do you agree or disagree?

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In order to escape from our routine lives and get a breath of fresh air, we all tend to travel, either back home or to a different
country
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. It is being said that the trend of visiting other countries might soon change and
majority
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the majority
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 will decide to go to their homeland.
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, I believe
this
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 is far from the truth.
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majority
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 of the people wish to
visit
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 a
country
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 which they have never been to before. Most do so to learn about that
country
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's culture, norms and traditions while others travel to try the several kinds of foods the
country
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 has to offer.
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, I have always wanted to
visit
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 Turkey to get a taste of their delicious kebabs and desserts, usually called
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Halva. Apart from
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,
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oftentimes
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often times
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 for foreign workers, the cost of
air fare
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airfare
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 to their home
country
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 might be expensive and the journey takes longer which is why they choose to
visit
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 countries nearby.
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, workers staying in foreign lands go to their motherland to meet their family and relatives which gives them a sense of belonging and comfort.
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, my parents always support the idea of going to Bangladesh rather than anywhere else as their family resides there.
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, many envision their economy to thrive by bringing in foreign currency and skills which can be utilized here. And
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, a lot of individuals desire
seeing
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 their
country
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's beauty and
discoveing
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discovering
 hidden gems which are not highlighted in the media always. To summarize, both the choices have their own reasons and
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 depends on the person travelling.
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 I am a very patriotic person myself, my choice will be to
visit
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 a new
country
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 as it is more economical and there are several destinations to choose from.
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