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some people say that ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines
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Ultra Modern Era is weighing upon technology a lot, which is leading to the less use of resources, which were used earlier for reading. Technology has led
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 to another extent, which has nowadays become useful, but
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 could be
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phases of
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.  To initiate,
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 has led individuals to be dependent upon on it, which is in an incline position on a day to day basis. It has made
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 of making books available online through the means of applications, and online portals. Which has helped many persons who are working, have less or no time for the newspaper or books to be read due to their working hours as well as the workload.
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, automation has helped
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not to be dependent upon the physically means of reading,
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- books, articles, newspapers, comics, as these are now available online and individuals find it easy reading while commuting to their respective work organisations. To add, it
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 leads to gaining more knowledge, as to whatever ebook could be read at
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 and anywhere.
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, in my
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ebooks
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 should not be the things on which people should be leaned
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. To add, it
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 of eyesight as seeing the gadget to read
ebooks
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.
Ebooks
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 are not meant for timepass, rather it contains knowledge and should be used in a proper way to understand the value and meaning of the material described by the author. To conclude, there are few pointers which are in the favor of the
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 and are absolutely good,
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, it
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 could lead to the lack of eyesight and
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 consequences which weren’t in an individual’s life and still aren’t.
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,
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 should not be
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preferred
 as much as other means to read.
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