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Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increases. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Punishments are essential to control violence in
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society.
Punishment
ensure
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 trust, safety and justice in the minds of the people. The trust of people
on
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 the law and order of the country increases when proper
punishment
 is given to the culprit. When it comes to giving capital
punishment
 (the death penalty) to ensure the security of our lives and to stop the increase in
crimes
 of violence, I partially agree with
this
 approach. Sentencing capital
punishment
 for serious
crimes
 like murder, rape, terrorism may stop the increase in that
crimes
upto
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up to
to
 some extent but not completely. It will help in increasing the fear in the minds of criminals before
comitting
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committing
 any
crimes
. It will
also
 help in gaining the trust of the people on the constitution of
country
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upto
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up to
to
 some extent.
Also
, to keep criminals in a prison requires
a
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proper investment in the infrastructure by the
governement
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government
. Sentencing
the
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capital
punishment
 to
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criminals will help in saving that money and
to invest
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 it in other development projects of the country.
On the other hand
, the morals like non-violence, tolerance and mercy will be ridiculed by sentencing capital
punishment
 to the culprits. Every man has two lives and the
second
 starts when he realises, he only has one. Sentencing
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capital
punishment
 won't give the man any chance of self-realization of his mistakes and to start living a better
life
 after the self-realization. The aim of
punishment
 must not be only to take the
life
 of
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criminal
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 for his deeds, but it should
also
 be to grant and spare the
life
 of a criminal in order to give
hima
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him a
him
 chance to improve and live a better
life
. It is important to keep morals like mercy, non-violence and tolerance in mind while sentencing
punishment
 to
culprit
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the culprit
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. at the same
time
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 it is important to ensure that the tolerance of the law must not be entitled as its weakness and capital
punishment
 must be sentenced when it is entitled so.
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