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It is better to grow a child in city than in rural areas, Do you agree or disagree?

#child #city #areas
Living conditions are very important for the overall
growth
 of
a children
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children
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.While some people prefer to raise their pupils in suburban areas.
However
,I believe that growing a
child
 in larger cities have major benefits,
such
 as access to better
education
 and
sports
facillities
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facilities
.
Firstly
, The urban areas provide the best in class
education
 infrastructure compared with
countryside
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the countryside
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.It not only allows them access to all the modern
education
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 tools
such
 as modern teaching methods but
also
 guidance by expert teachers.
In addition
, they have an option to choose from different private coaching institutions and modern libraries.
For instance
, a student studying in
the
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 metro city like Mumbai, can attend
world- known
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world-known
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 school and utilise the resources of the same for overall
growth
.
Secondly
, The cities will have better
facilties
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facilities
 for
sports
 activities. If a
child
 is interested to pursue
sports
 as
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a
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career,
then
 parents can easily find and enrol them in
such
sports
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a sports
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academy
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. If they are deprived of these
facilties
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facilities
 in a
country side
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countryside
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then
 the
child
have
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has
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 to curb their dreams and it might force a
child
 to pursue
dream
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a dream
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 which he is not passionate about. In turn, which will affect their overall
growth
 and performance in academics. It is quite important that parents should be able to provide the best
envirnoment
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environment
 for playing a special sport like tennis or football. In conclusion, I believe it is wise to grow the
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 in urban cities because of the better
education
envirnoment
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environment
 and overall access to
sports
faciltilies
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facilities
.
In
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counrty
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country
side
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,side
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such
growth
atmophere
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atmosphere
 can not be guaranteed.
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