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Because most information about culture and history can be found on the internet today, museums are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that these days the
culture
 and history
museums
 are impacted for our children and its like some of an interesting way to learn or discover our grandparent's stuff. The question is, why
museums
 are necessary if we can search for
information
 about the
culture
 and history on the internet?. In
this
 ,
an
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essay I am going to explain why
museums
 are necessary for our grand grandparents. In terms of the positive side, saving some memories from an old fashioned
culture
such
 as DVD or gift cards or maybe 80s cars is noteworthy.In fact, the cost will increase someday
such
 as a mona
lisa
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 painting in Paris.
In addition
, the museum's is its way to Increase the rate of tourists in various countries and every single continent huge different
culture
 that compelling and enjoyable
such
 an African colourful painting or clay masterpiece will never forget about it obesity if they take the pieces of
information
 from the internet boring to do.
Moreover
, the
museums
 those days in some countries is expensive to visit it will cost the tickets for the aeroplane and the hotel reservation and ticket for transport,
museums
such
 a challenging way for the
information
 to the art piece it costs millions. Plus,they will give
such
 AirPods to listen to the
information
 but the crowded in various
museums
 that would disturb your focusing normally you just want to leave. In conclusion,
although
 memories about history and
culture
 impact us and is a great thing to learn, it will cost so much money.
Therefore
, I believe that prepare a budget once a year for travelling and visiting
museums
 is desirable to do.
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