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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Every year many
languages
 in the world
not
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 exist. Some individuals believe that life will be less difficult if
less
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number
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fewer
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 of
languages
 exist.
This
 essay agrees with the statement because
this
allow
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people
 to explore other individuals and will allow them to
work
 at any workplace.
Firstly
, more residents can know a wide range of
people
 from different backgrounds.
That is
 to, say because cultural and social difference matters a lot. Most
of
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people
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the people
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 can have a common mode of speaking and can express themselves freely.
Moreover
, it
also
give
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 them an opportunity to overcome the language barriers. Presently, due to more
languages
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people
 feel uncomfortable
to express
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 themselves freely.
However
, fewer
languages
 will solve that problem.
For example
,
Spanish
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the Spanish
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 language is extensively spoken by speakers worldwide.
Therefore
, more citizens express themselves without any hesitation in other countries.
Secondly
, it allows the speaker to
work
 in any job environment without any issue. It has been said because more companies tend to communicate
with
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 one or two
languages
.
As a result
, it becomes
next
 to easy for employees to speak with a large number of co-workers or
people
.
For instance
, English is mainly used by
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international firms to recruit workers in the company. As a consequence, more candidates apply because they are comfortable with English. In conclusion, residents are privileged to talk with a huge number of individuals.
Also
,
people
 around the world get to
work
 in more jobs friendly environment without major issues. These are two reasons due to which fewer
languages
work
 better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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