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Too many old buildings are in danger and demolished in many conutries. what are the main reasons? how can they be protected?

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Ancient
buildings
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 reflect the rich heritage of a particular country
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, nowadays these are being crumbled to meet the demands of
urbanished
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urbanised
 society.
This
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 essay shall discuss the causes behind their removal along with viable solutions. The various reasons leading to
demolition
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the demolition
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 of old
buildings
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 are as follows
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, these
buildings
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 are removed to meet the needs of
growing
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a growing
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 population. Sky-scrappers are part
if
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of
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urbanised
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an urbanised
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societyand
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society and
 they are needed as land is becoming scarce. Some of these old
buildings
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 which are neither easy to live in nor are attractive to tourists can be removed considering the increasing demand
of
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 land by
growing
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the growing
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 population.
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, some historical
buildings
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 are eyesore since these are prone to damage that can be caused by natural
disaster
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disasters
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hence
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 creating
threat
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a threat
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 to
general
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the general
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 public.
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, bulldozing these
buildings
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 is a way to ensure
safety
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the safety
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 of people who live
next
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 to these
buildings
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.
Lastly
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, lack of sufficient funds is
also
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 the reason on account of which its become difficult to arrange proper maintenance
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 they lose their
eye pleasing
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eye-pleasing
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 value. The major steps that can be taken to preserve these
buildings
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 are as follows The Government should plan and allocate
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of funds for their
maintenace
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maintenance
 in
budget
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the budget
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 itself. To add, revenue generated from tax collection should
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 be used appropriately. The general public should
also
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 take the onus of keeping these
buildings
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 clean by not throwing garbage and carving their names on walls
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 As a consequence, if these
buildings
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 are renovated
then
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 these can be preserved. To conclude,
removal
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the removal
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 of these
buildings
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 due to lack of funds and their improper maintenance can be avoided with the support of
government
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the government
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 and
general
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the general
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 public.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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