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. Rich countries are getting richer while poor countries are getting poorer. What is the cause of this? What could be done to solve this problem?

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It is quite evident that the rich
countries
 are getting much richer whereas the poorer
nations
 are in fact going backwards financially.
This
 essay will discuss in detail, the causes and the solution to
this
 problem.
Firstly
, it is quite ironic but the imbalance of the distribution of wealth amongst the
nations
 isn't consistent. In my perspective, the predominant cause of
this
 discrepancy is corruption. The rich and well-developed
nations
 have been able to gradually minimise if not completely eradicate
this
 global problem, whereas, least developed or financially incompetent
nations
 haven't been able to get on top of
this
 inherent issue.
Secondly
, I strongly believe that the stronger
nations
 actively exploit the natural resources of the poorer
countries
, which in return benefits the poorer country far less than it should do, despite being the source of the resources.
In addition
,
this
 depressing issue can be solved, if the poorer
nations
 can curb the rate of corruption via proper education and harsher penalties for those who commit them, doing so culprits will be discouraged and the general population will be more aware and less susceptible against bribing.
For example
, Bhutan is a relatively small country but with a low rate of corruption, which has enabled it to be one of the happiest
countries
 in the world.
Furthermore
, the rich
nations
also
 need to increase their aid to other
nations
 and be willing to actively share the resources in order to provide poorer
nations
 with the opportunities to excel. In conclusion, it is an unavoidable fact that the wealth gap between rich and poor
countries
 is widening, but
this
 can't be overlooked.
Moreover
, for the sake of humanity and sustainable development,
this
 ever-increasing gap needs to be filled as soon as possible with global cooperation.
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