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Today‘s children are living under more pressure from the society than children in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is no doubt that these days we have compelling internet with state with the art speed let you up-to-date from
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twitter
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.The question is, are the
children
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society opposite the
children
 in the past?. In
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, the social network uncomplicated to use or work with
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 the knowledge to the
children
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 the world?.In fact,in the year 2020 the
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covered
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-19 forced our kids to
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complete
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online from houses in the quarantine it fust
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safer than the schools. I think
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next
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equipment
 or butter as long as we want to learn more on
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various
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,not the all of social media application suitable for the
children
 shouldn't give them the technology tablet and forget about them we must surveillance just to make sure there
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receive
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 on the tablet for 20 min the kids should take rest for 5min to restart
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their
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accept
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children
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