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Do you prefer living in an urban or rural area? State your preference and give reasons to why you feel that way?

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We live in an era of globalization, the most people go for metropolitan than the countryside.Personally,
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 would rather choose the
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 because of the opportunity for my career and journey at an early age when
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 get financial freedom to prefer the countryside.
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 foremost, in an urban area you are competitive with numerous amount of people for goals and meet so high-level incredible ones like Elon Musk, Bill Gates, Steve Jobs.
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. there is a chance to become one of them too.On the other ,hand rural they even don't have decent pay compare with the
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 and there has no competition that means no development.
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, Downtown areas don't offer a sophisticated speciality job.In my case I graduated cybersecurity at Mongolian Technology University, only megacities hire me for
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 work.
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 people who are good at blue-collar jobs rural more suitable because rural areas have factories and farms. In conclusion, to reside in a
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 are or far from an urban area can bring a lot of differences in your life.As my profession demands need a high-end computer and fastest internet other facilities available in the
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 and I would rather my development and wealth than my health.
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