Large companies use sports events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, sporting gatherings have become popular all over the world.

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has made several

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advertise their products

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events

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some individuals believe

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to be harmful

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sports

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, I partly agree with

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, as it can be both beneficial and disadvantageous to

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. On one hand, people are of the opinion that

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made by large

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during

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reduces the thrill of

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games. Breaks which are

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supposed

to be short are

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elongated

engaged

to promote various brands.

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, increasing the waiting time for spectators.

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sports

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had 4 breaks of 10minutes duration each.

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, with the

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introduction

of Pepsi and Coca

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brands into the mix, the breaks

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been increased to 20 minutes each.

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has

fraustrated

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frustrated

the spectators leading to people boycotting

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events

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and leaving earlier than they planned.

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such

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companies

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have created wealth for the stakeholders in

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events

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in turn helps to increase the salaries of athletes who

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in these

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, football has been said to be the richest

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sports

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in the world.

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is because

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every club are backed by a rich enterprise who advertise their products on the

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of every

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player

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in a team. The more large

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adverstise

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advertise

sports

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, the wealthier the athletes become. In conclusion,

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people are of the opinion that

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made by large

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in sporting ceremonies are hurtful to the game as it reduces the thrill of watching the

events

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, I am of the opinion that , it

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can be positive to the game by creating wealth for those who

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events

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. It should

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not be removed but regulated.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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4 paragraphs

286 words

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