Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people's lives and should receive more funding.' To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, both online or offline
news
forums are rapidly increasing people reach.
Such
companies spend a big proportion of their annual budget in covering global information
although
, for the people,
news
coming from their neighbourhood is more applicable.
Thus
, there should be more funds allocated to community reporting. I strongly agree that
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of funds would be more beneficial to
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society.
Firstly
, the residents of a city or state should be well-informed about the current affairs in their proximity, like, criminal activities, upcoming sports opportunities, job fairs, etc.
Moreover
, if they would know about a suspect in their area, people might stay extra cautious and would keep their family safe.
Although
unforseen
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situations are not in anyone's control,
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being vigilant might mitigate the risk.
For example
, there has been an incident in Japan, where a local
news
reporter spread
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news
about a kidnapper who abducted 2 children in their area.
As a result
, other families got alarmed and immediately requested
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special police force assistance. Another point to consider is that extra funding on
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reporting will probably result in boosting the
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of youngsters
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when their achievements would be featured on a public portal.
Furthermore
,
this
recognition would help growing children in becoming more confident about their skillset.
Consequently
, they would enhance their passion, which they could present globally in future.
For instance
, an Olympic medal winner in Tennis from India shared in her recent interview, that she grew up watching a local game on the television, which always motivated her to practice more and strive towards a goal. In conclusion, I completely agree that there are more benefits of regional reporting for a country in comparison to a heavy focus on global broadcasting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immediacy
  • relevance
  • community cohesion
  • investigative journalism
  • accountability
  • mismanagement
  • economic argument
  • globalization
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • well-rounded global perspective
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