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Some cities have few controls over design and construction on housing and office building. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In some societies. some policies let the residents
design
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 their properties out of their own interests. There are some advantages and disadvantages associated with
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 topic. In my opinion, the drawbacks take precedence over the positive aspects.
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 some authorities in some locations have little control over buildings' designs, owners are able to
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 their homes or office buildings, which has few advantages. In
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 case,
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 each person has a different desire, the diversity of the town would be increased and let the owners feel happier.
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, individuals who, are free to
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 their own homes, have more confidence, when they try to show others their sense of art in the end.
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, some human beings believe that if residents have an opportunity to
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 their own houses, societies will encounter vigorous problems
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 as a lack of harmony among the neighbourhoods.
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, if constructions were not built on the basis of certain regulations, the view of the city would be annoying.
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, a neighbourhood with different sizes of houses is not as beautiful as the one with houses of the same size. In conclusion,
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, there are a few advantages regarding owners' capability in scheming freely their homes, there are a plethora of drawbacks that outweigh the pros.
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, I believe that urban planners are more qualified to
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 accommodations and office buildings
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 the fact that they are aware of every regulation that should be considered in
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 field.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • aesthetic appeal
  • architectural styles
  • cultural and aesthetic appeal
  • housing shortages
  • urban development
  • safety standards
  • infrastructure
  • visual harmony
  • environmental degradation
  • property owners
  • construction processes
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