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In many countries,plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweighs disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
plastic
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 is one of the most popular materials, especially in
food
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the food
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 industry which is mostly used to cover products. In my opinion, business companies are only the
one
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 who
reap
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 significant benefits while
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 utilization threats both
environment
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 and customers’ health and causes long-term consequences
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 with, replacing traditional materials
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plastic
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 to cover goods favorises the preservation and delivery process whereas it
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 helps to reduce sale’ price and bring back more profits. Indeed, thanks
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 unique properties
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 as impermeable or easily change form without being
break
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,
plastic
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 is widely used for
contain
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 foot and beverage. Comparing to paper or glass
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for
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 example,
plastic
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box
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boxes
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 and bottles could conserve
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 products and remain their
a
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quality
in
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 a
longer
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 time and being less vulnerable through the shipping phases.
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, food manufacturing companies could save a large budget by using
plastic
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 because of its cheap price.
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, they can reduce their
product
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 costs and make them more competitive in
retail
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 market.
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, used
plastic
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 wrappers damage critically not only the biology system but
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 human-being health in
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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. On the one hand,
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 artificial substance
take
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 100 years to be degraded into micro pieces and it is Indigestible.
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,
plastic
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 bags and covers will stay almost forever in nature, block flowing water or mix with agricultural soil.
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, there are many example cases that demonstrate the dangerous threat of
plastic
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 to animals life,
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 as many whales and fish died by hungry because their stomach was full of
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 material, or being stuck in those containers.
on the other hand
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, micro-
plastic
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cause
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causes
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 grave diseases for human ones they occasionally eat it. Indeed, scientific research shows that
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 substance disorders the organs’ function of patients and it is due to several chronic illnesses,
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 as cancer. In conclusion, using
plastic
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 to contain issues could be a better solution for
food
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the food
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 business,
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, its danger
towards
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to
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environment
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the environment
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 and public health is more alarming and outweigh
of
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its mentioned advantage.
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