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some people think that they can go to gym to remain fit,while other think that there are other better ways. discuss both the view along with your opinion.

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Healthy
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 mind can fit only into
healthy
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a healthy
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 body. To attain a good fitness level, there are many
options
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 like going to gyms, doing meditation, yoga or joining some sports activity. Many
people
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 are of the view that they can go to
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gym
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 to remain fit
on the other hand
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 many
people
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 think that there are other better ways to keep themselves healthy and fit.
Firstly
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, going to
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gym
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 has its own merits like
one
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 can allocate fixed time from his/
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 daily life to do many types of
excercises
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exercises
 which are helpful to keep our heart, bones and functioning of other parts of the body. In Gyms, music, trainers and other
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 doing
excercises
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exercises
 motivates to do more and more. But it has its own major limitations like
one
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 has to pay a huge amount as fee which is not possible for everyone and as the gyms are made in closed premises so
one
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 can not get the fresh air.
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 are other
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 which are better from
Gym
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 from many aspects. Morning walks, running, cycling, doing yoga all these are free of cost and suitable for all age group
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. In these
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one
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 can have
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a healthy
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 atmosphere, get to meet many
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 to talk and walk with. To conclude, considering all the points mentioned, I personally feel that the suitability of other
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overweigh
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 the merits of going to
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gym
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the gym
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fitness
  • gymnasium
  • equipment
  • workout routine
  • group classes
  • community
  • motivation
  • home workouts
  • sustainable
  • holistic
  • mental well-being
  • diet
  • yoga
  • pilates
  • accessibility
  • financial constraints
  • aerobic exercises
  • cardiovascular health
  • flexibility training
  • strength training
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