All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In modern society, every human being
need
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to have education and
healthcare
. Without proper learning and medical system, life quality will be dramatically decreased and nations cannot be developed. So if the government can free it for
everyone
, It will be
a good news
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and I strongly agree with it.
First
of all, we all know that going to
school
and having good medical treatment
are
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necessary right that
everyone
need
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needs
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to have. But in real life,
school
fees and hospital bills are still a big fence for some people to go through.
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take an example. In my
country
, many families cannot pay for their children’s
tution
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tuition
, so they have to stop going to
school
. Pull the children away from proper education because schooling
are
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unaffordable, with parents and students, that’s really sad. But if going to
school
and pursue knowledge are free,
everyone
can go to
school
. If
everyone
can go to
school
, national knowledge will be increase and that
country
could develop much better. How about free
healthcare
? A recent survey in India shows that 38
percent
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of people die every year because they do not have money to pay for proper medical treatment. With free hospitals, citizens can take care of their health better. Healthy nations
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definitely
definetly
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a good base for a
country
to develop better. Some developed countries with free
healthcare
for people like Australia, France have
booming
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rise in the past few decades, are the biggest example to prove my opinion about free
healthcare
. In conclusion, if free education and medical facilities are provided by the government, that
country
will take a lot of benefits. With
citizen
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citizens
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can approach their basic needs easily, to me,
that is
a big success for the nation.
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