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The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, the Internet became the major of people's daily life. Especially, it is evident that computers play a key part in most student's
study
 in a rapidly developing society.
Thus
, it exists some people believe that
teachers
 are not necessary for education. In the following essay, I will publish my perspective and elaborate on it. On one hand, it's undoubtful that computers have an advantage in student's
study
. In 2020, because of the covid-19 virus, all
students
 have to
study
 at the home, they via some apps like zoom to educate
students
 for long-distance distance, it not depends on where are you staying and living. It's more convenient and quick compared to teaching in the classroom.
For example
,
students
 could
study
 stay home and it saves the cost of transportation and time, they have more energy to
study
 hard. It would release the pressure of traffic and the current population.
On the other hand
, as everyone knows that every coin has two sides,
teachers
also
 are significant in education. In school,
teachers
 not only teach us knowledge of books but,
also
 tell us the standard of morals and have positive energy.
Moreover
,
teachers
 could become
students
' close friends, they almost talk about everything. Some
students
 have pressures from
study
, family or life,
teachers
 can tell them how to relax and continue to work hard.
Besides
, most
students
 have no discipline, it's important that
teachers
 have to observe
students
' behaviours. In conclusion,
although
 computers have widely appeared in our education, their technology is not very mature.
Teachers
 have
also
 very important.
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