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Many people believe children should begin learning a foreign language in primary school instead of secondary school. Do you think the advantages of learning a foreign language in primary school outweigh the disadvantages?j

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In today's world, it is believed by some part of the population that
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 should start learning a foreign language when they are in a primary
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 in a secondary
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during their childhood.
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, recent research has shown that the adult's ability to
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, another reason why primary schools should provide students with classes of foreign languages is that they have a lighter schedule.
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, one survey has shown that at a
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 they can devote to extra studying. Eventually, to conclude, I think the advantages of
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,
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 they can spend studying languages.
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