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computer are being used more and more im education.some people say its positive trend other say its negative impact. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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No doubt, in the modern era
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 plays an essential role in everyone life because it makes life easier. In every ,field the
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 of a
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 is increased day by day. some individuals say that it is a positive development.
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, others think that it has a negative impact. In
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essay I will discuss both the view along with my opinion. To embark upon, there is some reason why a
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 is essential in the
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 and foremost, when
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 doing their
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 while the
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 they can gain extra knowledge from the internet and understand the actual meaning of difficult words.
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 ,they can store the important document related to
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 and check them whenever they want. since in the
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 it is essential to carry heavy books because all the syllabus related to
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 is not available in one book.They if
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 have their own pc it could be easier to store all the data. According to the recent survey by the University of Cambridge it can be seen that in japan the accuracy rate of
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 in the
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 increased to high value because they
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computers
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 for their
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, there is some reason why the
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 in the
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system
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 creates a negative impact on learners.
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, if
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 always
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computers
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 for
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 it is not good for their health because they could be suffered from eyesight problems and they can
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 pay little attention to physical activities.To explicate it, in Delhi 70% of pupils
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 specs because they suffered from eyesight problems by
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computer
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 all the time. Keeping the above facts in view I believe that the
use
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 of
computers
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 is essential in the
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system
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 but to some extent. If
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 have an urgent requirement for a
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 they can
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 it but not always because young age is a golden time for
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 if they face health problems at
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 they can not survive for their whole life. To put in a nutshell by dropping my pen down,
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 there are some bad impact of using a
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 on student health if learners can
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 pc for only relevant purpose
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 they can increase their level and skills.

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