Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

In recent days, there is
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about whether crimes should have fixed
punishments
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or the situation of crimes be taken into account when deciding
punishments
. Personally, I prefer the latter because everyone has different backgrounds and reasons that lead them to commit a
crime
. There are two main reasons why people argue that fixed
punishment
should be made.
To begin
with, fixed
punishments
can prevent those from committing a
crime
since they might receive
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penalty
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.
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, those who intend to kill someone might think twice before taking action. It is the
punishment
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them so that
criminals
may never attempt to convict a
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. Another reason is fixed
punishment
makes
criminals
of each
crime
treated fairly. Same
crime
has different levels
such
as severe or light sentences, which made fixed
punishments
equally to everyone because no matter how serious the
crime
is,
criminals
all deserve the same penalty due to committing a
crime
.
Nevertheless
, I believe that it is still essential to consider the motivation or situation for committing it. I think the penalties should depend on the level of the
crime
.
For instance
, a person who steals food from a market comparing with one robbing a bank. The level of the
crime
is completely different and both
criminals
should still have the same
punishment
? I do not agree with
this
view,
thus
, I think it is important to understand the circumstances of an individual
crime
in advance
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and
then
decide the
punishments
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as teenagers can
also
be discussed. Since teenagers are easily influenced by surrounding
such
as peers and parental love, they are more likely to commit a
crime
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wrong way or making wrong friends.
However
, teenagers may not be aware of the crimes they have committed, so
punishments
should not be fixed so as to allow them to have a
second
chance to correct themselves. In conclusion,
although
people have different views about having fixed
punishments
or
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consider more about deciding on
punishments
. In my opinion, fixed
punishments
do have some advantages, whereas
punishments
considering different factors can bring
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to all
criminals
and people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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