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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developed countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It is commonly witnessed that today multinational
companies
 are becoming increasingly developing countries like India. Both the merits and demerits will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The foremost advantage is, with the advancement in the number of multinational
companies
 in developing countries,
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 lucrative job opportunities
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 increased manifold. More
people
 are liable to do jobs of their interest.With the increase in
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employment
opportunities
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 the lifestyle has
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.There is a boost towards the quality of living and
people
 are capable to spend more. Another clear merit is, with the incline towards
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 livelihood of
people
, there is comprehensive growth of the nation.
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 development is mandatory in every respect. According to research conducted by Henry cook, it was revealed that
people
 who have better livelihood contribute 60 % towards the comprehensive growth of the nation.
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 the escalation in multinational
companies
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competition towards these
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 certainly inclined. The more are the number, the more of the results in the problematic survival of these
companies
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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