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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English speaking friend.

#house #english #friend
Dear Nari, I hope all is well with you. I have good news and want to let you know as soon as possible. I
finally
 got permanent residency from
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the Canada
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Canada
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Canadian
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 government a few weeks ago. There are many excellent benefits for people who
is
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are
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 able to live
as
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permanent
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permanently
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.
Most
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For most
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 of them, one of the best things is
super
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a super
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mortagage
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mortgage
 loan from any bank.
Therefore
, I applied it a week ago and received it 3 days ago.
In addition
, as you know, I lived with
roommate
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 for 3 years,
I
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and I
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had no own space for a
while
. I wanted to live alone
from
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this
 year. In the end, I found a suitable apartment for me through my realtor. In terms of my new apartment, It is a high-rise complex and located
in
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next
Stadium
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to Stadium
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 Station. It has a huge bedroom,
small-sized
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a small
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 den,
the
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a
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 living room,
kitchen
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a kitchen
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 and one bathroom. I think
this
 structure is perfect for people who want to live by themselves.
Last
 but not least, our building has a huge Gym, a big sauna and
the
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a
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 meeting room as well. If you have free time these days,
i
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I
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 would like to invite you to my place
on
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this
weekends
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weekend
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. I hope to hear your reply as soon as you can and if you don't make it
this
weekends
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weekend
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, let me know when you are available to visit my place.
cheers
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Cheers
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, Amy
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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