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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The importance of meals has been a topic in limelight ever since the beginning of mankind. A portion of the
population
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 has thought that information can solve the starvation problem around the globe whereas others reckon
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 aid can be the only solution to it.
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 essay will discuss both the arguments and emphasize why education is the key to end
hunger
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 all over the world. Education has played an essential role in lessening many malpractices like crimes, illegal trades, etc. By educating people,
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 wastage can be reduced drastically as people will learn the importance of a single meal as well as how to store the grains safely. Another important reason would be, as the overall
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 starts getting educated, the economy of the nation will rise gradually. For the instance with the free schooling provided for the folk of Uganda, the economic debt has decreased significantly and the country has started showing positive growth.
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,
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 aid is necessary for most of the
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 struck areas. Rich and developed nations should come forward and try to help
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 areas by donating or giving assistance in
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 aid.
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 will result in the reduction of the economic burden on the poor nations as well. To conclude,
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 can be eradicated in two ways, one of them is by educating the crowd in the under-developed society and the
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 is by providing meal compensation to them. In my opinion, educating the
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 will play an extremely important role in eliminating the
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 problem as it will have a long term solution whereas providing help in respect of foodstuff will be a short term solution to it. The rich community can support the poor tribe with meal assistance till the
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 of the latter gets educated.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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