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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is acknowledgeable that medicines and other products are routinely tested on animals before they are cleared for human use. In my view, while I tend towards the viewpoint that animal testing is morally wrong, I would have to support a limited amount of animal experiments for the development of medicines. On the one hand, there are clear ethical arguments against animal experimentation. To use a common example of
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 argue that humans have no right to subject creatures to
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, they claim that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused and that scientists should need alternative methods of
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, reliable alternatives to animal experimentation may not always be available within a short duration of time. Supporters of the adoption of animals for medical analysis believe that a certain amount of
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suffering on the part of mice or rats can be justified if human lives are saved. As an illustration, opponents of
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 might feel differently if a member of their own families needed a medical treatment that had been developed through the use of animal experiments. Personally, I completely agree with the banning of animal testing for non-medical products, but I insist that there may be a necessary evil where new drugs and medical procedures are concerned. In conclusion, it seems to me that it might be wrong to ban testing on animals for vital medical
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 until equally effective alternatives have been developed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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