In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree?

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recent decades, the amount of men and women with
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fast foods has increased dramatically in many nations. It is argued that states should charge fast
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companies more
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because of their
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would reduce the demand for it.
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illnesses cost the taxpayer billions of
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every year.
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who eat too much fast
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likely to suffer from costly diseases associated with being overweight.
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, they have to go to
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more regularly for treatment and
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puts a strain on the
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, a large proportion of the United Kingdon’s National
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Service budget is spent on preventable, obesity-related diseases,
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as heart disease and diabetes Another reason why fast
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restaurants should pay extra
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is to raise the cost in order to decrease demand. Any extra
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would be added to the normal price of the
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, and as prices go up, fewer
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will be able to afford to buy fatty
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.
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would reduce the amount of junk
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people
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eat and the result would be a
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nation. The UK government,
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, introduced a ‘sugar
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’ on sugary soft drinks in an attempt to fight the obesity epidemic. In conclusion, many
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consuming fast
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develop
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issues and it is essential to put higher
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tax
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because of the high pressure on
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budget and decreasing the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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