The prevention of health problems and health illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

One point which I believe to be pivotal is the fact that prevention is better than cure. By maintaining proper
health
,
people
can find themselves living longer, healthy
lives
,
also
prohibition is cheaper in comparison with treatment during serious illness.
This
essay will discuss why
such
prevention is eventually essential and how government funding can help create
such
measures.I completely agree that
this
is the best way to tackle the issues of deteriorating public
health
.
Health
maintenance typically consists of methods or activities that seek to reduce the predictable
health
problems and avoid medical treatments and medicine consumption.
This
method can reduce the significant economic burden of diseases.
In addition
to improving the length and quality of
people
's
lives
.
For example
, tobacco consumption is injurious for
health
; avoiding it and doing regular exercises and following other steps can significantly reduce your chances for illness or early death. Annual check-ups, as well as specific tests and screenings, are a few examples of preventive care. It
also
is called routine care and is vital to reduce predictable problems.
Hence
prevention care programs are required.
On the other hand
, nations must provide funds to an allocated stream to improve their
people
's
health
. It will help in preserving uncertain fatal diseases
such
as COVID-19.
For instance
, India is a vastly populated country;
however
, less than 3 % of its GDP is spent on public
health
;
on the contrary
, countries like Canada spend more than 10 % of their GDP on public
health
.
Thus
, because of the shortage of resources, In April
,
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2021, India had suffered
devastating
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loss of human
lives
during the
second
way of COVID-19. For all
such
reasons, government funding is a mandatory element in tackling
health
problems and maintaining good
health
for their community. To conclude,
People
are equally responsible for preventing their own
health
and following healthy measures.
However
, there are some sections of the society
who
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do not have enough funds to take early steps;
hence
it is the government's responsibility to allocate funds for their community to prevent their
persons
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lives
during pandemic situations.
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