An increasing number of people now are using the Internet to meet other and socialize .some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated .Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is
escalating
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use
of
internet
in the society to link up and socialize.It has brought up mixed feelings in the society on to whether
people
are closer together or they have become more secluded.In
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I will discuss both sides and give my own opinion.
Firstly
,
Internet
has made
communication
easier
to
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other
people
,whereby,it is now very easy to keep in touch by email or instant message services.Some decade ago,
people
would write letters and wait for days for the message to be delivered,and with
this
,
Internet
has really revolutionalized
communication
.
For
example
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a
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research done by
communication
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authority
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shows that 90% out of 1000
people
communicate with 10
people
in 24hours through
Internet
channels.Since
Internet
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is as easy as ABC to
use
,
therefore
,society
have
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found it interesting to link and socialize with
people
. For
this
reason,
Internet
has brought
people
closer together through several available
Internet
channels
unlike
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previous decades.
Secondly
,since
Internet
has brought information close to us,including shops and other services are now available online,the focus to keep chatting and sending nails has changed.
people
are now occupied with other profitable activities by
use
of
internet
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than just to socialize.For
instant
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,research done by
psychology
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department shows that 60% of marriage
dispute
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disputes
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are brought up by lack of
communication
due to
use
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of mobile
phone
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while in
alternative
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they should be talking about family matters.
Therefore
,
this
has made
people
to
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be more secluded. To conclude,
internet
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the internet
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has tremendously
revolutionalized
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communication
.You
nolonger
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no longer
wait for long
lto
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to
deliver
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.
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