An increasing number of people now are using the Internet to meet other and socialize .some think this has brought people closer together while other think people are becoming more isolated .Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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escalating
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the escalating
use
of internet
in the society to link up and socialize.It has brought up mixed feelings in the society on to whether people
are closer together or they have become more secluded.In this
essay
I will discuss both sides and give my own opinion.
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Firstly
,Internet
has made communication
easier to
other Change preposition
with
people
,whereby,it is now very easy to keep in touch by email or instant message services.Some decade ago,people
would write letters and wait for days for the message to be delivered,and with this
,Internet
has really revolutionalized communication
.For
example
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communication
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the communication
authority
shows that 90% out of 1000 Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
people
communicate with 10 people
in 24hours through Internet
channels.Since Internet
is as easy as ABC to Add an article
the Internet
use
,therefore
,society have
found it interesting to link and socialize with Change the verb form
has
people
.
For this
reason,Internet
has brought people
closer together through several available Internet
channels unlike
previous decades.
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Secondly
,since Internet
has brought information close to us,including shops and other services are now available online,the focus to keep chatting and sending nails has changed.people
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of internet
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the internet
instant
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an instant
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department shows that 60% of marriage Correct article usage
the psychology
dispute
are brought up by lack of Fix the agreement mistake
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communication
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of mobile Correct article usage
the use
phone
while in Fix the agreement mistake
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alternative
they should be talking about family matters.Add an article
the alternative
Therefore
, this
has made people
to
be more secluded.
To conclude,Change the verb form
apply
internet
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the internet
revolutionalized
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revolutionised
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no longer
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