You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend.In your letter • say why he/she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting job is a good idea for him/her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Soliha,
I am writing to give advice to Soliha. Soliha wrote to me and asked for advice: should I choose to study in
college
or should I get a job? I advise you to work
based on my opinion. Because when you study in college
, you repeat what you learned before.
You can get a job without going to college
, I believe you. After that, you will waste a lot of time studying in college
. Also
, you have tried many experiments to make it happen. Therefore
, I advise you to work
. Then
you have been attending courses related to your field, and if you attend and work
on these courses, your experience will increase significantly. With a little guidance from your manager, everything will be great. It is better if you allocate 2 hours after work
for additional lessons.
If you studied
chemistry and biology, you can Wrong verb form
study
work
as a doctor. But first
learn all the principles of nursing and Add a comma
first,
then
work
in your direction.
Yours sincerely,
Qobiljonova KamolaSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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Try to provide more specific reasons why college might not be enjoyable, such as the environment, theoretical focus, or mismatch with your friend's learning style.
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Explain more clearly why getting a job can be particularly beneficial, such as gaining practical experience or financial independence.
coherence cohesion
The letter would benefit from smoother transitions between paragraphs. Try to use linking words or phrases to improve the flow.
coherence cohesion
Try to keep each paragraph focused on a single idea to provide a clearer structure. For example, one paragraph for why college might not be enjoyable, one for why a job is a good idea, and one for job suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Good greeting and closing statements. They set a friendly tone appropriate for writing to a friend.
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The writing tone is suitable and friendly, which is appropriate for the letter's purpose to a friend.