Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they could get a good job once they are released.

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Misconception and lack of research about the criminal world have been revolving in our

society

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for decades.

People

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, today are convinced that the offenders who have been imprisoned for their misdeed have a scope to reinvent themselves in the community by giving them a chance to educating them in the prison which will benefit them to obtain a job once they are out; in

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reducing the number of crimes in the

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. I disagree that limited or no

education

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may cause a person to be a criminal and believe that it has nothing to do with the knowledge gained from schooling or at-home

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I disagree that

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has nothing to do with the decrease in the number of crimes, I see why some

people

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may think that it is essential for them along with

society

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, it would be due to misconceptions they have that only non-educated

people

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commit transgression. To illustrate

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, doctors with a doctorate degree have a personality that they would never commit any offence where they portray to be well mannered as well as have good morals and ethics.

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people

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believe that offenders do wrong deeds because of a lack of money for their survival.

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, a person from

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underprivileged background are often uneducated as non of their family members can pay for

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which leads to no job and later poverty. To survive one needs food, water and shelter so they think that lack of

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amenities causes them to commit a

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people

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are convinced that

education

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and jobs will help reduce

crime

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society

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. Research has been proven that it is the state of mind which plays a vital role in being a criminal rather than one’s

education

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Education

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is not the answer for solving

crime

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society

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;

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, one needs to be mindfully stable. Despite, doctors graduating from a renowned university evidence show that there are a number of culprits in the jails for committing crimes like

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, once a doctor was mal-practising in a hospital by selling body organs for a lesser amount.

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, one doesn’t need to be educated to get a job as there are many fields that require skills.

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, farming in India is usually done by skilled workers who are un-educated. I believe that the best way to overcome the

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is to help the criminals by appointing psychologists to treat them by understanding the reason behind

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actions together with providing them with essential survival aids. To conclude,

education

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is not a solution to minimise

crime

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society

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rather providing them with the necessary help will not only make them

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better

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but will

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help them to distinguish right from wrong.

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