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Write about the following topic. In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The smarter you work the more you earn.
This
 is a true statement. So, should only those
people
 earn high
salaries
, who work harder and smarter, or should the Government impose some constraints as to not allow
salaries
 beyond a certain threshold? In
this
 essay, we will discuss both views and conclude if one is important than the other. In
this
 competitive world, it is very difficult to find a high-paying job with many limited opportunities out there as compared to the number of
people
 qualified. In many countries, there are very few
people
 who earn extremely high
salaries
this
 is mainly because of the two
reasons
, one being the qualification and the other being the quality and efficiency of work.
for instance
, a person who has graduated from Harvard Business School earns 3 times more than someone who has graduated from some other university. There are some
people
 who think that
this
 is good for the country as those high earning
people
 bring growth to the economy and it simultaneously increases the standard of living of the
people
 in the country.
Nevertheless
, there are some
people
 who believe that government should impose constraints as to not allow to draw
salaries
 beyond a certain threshold. There are many
reasons
 for
this
 opinion. The most common reason is that everyone in society should be treated equally and should have equal standards of living. There are just
handful
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 of
reasons
 that describe why there should be government restrictions on
salaries
 above a limit. In a nutshell, both opinions have their own sets of valid
reasons
, and in my
opinion
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 both are important views and
therefore
 there should be a balance between the two.
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