the media plays a valuable role in keeping us informed and entertained. However, many people believe that it has too much power and freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Media
has been helping people in various ways to be exposed to a wealth of information and
also
enrich their spiritual lives significantly;
however
, it is claimed to affect negatively
on
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
numerous individuals as
it’s
Correct your spelling
its

The word it’s doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

show examples
influence is uncontrollable.
This
essay will expand both sentiments;
however
, from my perspective, I would believe that the
media
’s power and freedom are strong enough to manipulate human’s life. On the one hand, most of the news sources are broadcast on Tv and websites
such
as Facebook or Twitter.
This
allows the audience to search for up-to-date information, access a wealth of news and seem to be the most time-saving and useful way to get them updated with contemporary social or controversial issues.
Moreover
, people are
also
provided with great opportunities to broaden their knowledge about the world around them.
For instance
, current affairs on official channels always bring about the latest news and it not only keeps business and citizens well-updated but
also
provides people with many helpful skills in emergency situations
such
as fire or food poisoning.
Besides
,
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
publishing plays a vital role in entertaining audiences with various platforms including comedy programmes or video games which significantly reduces stress levels for audiences who are working under pressure.
However
, there is always misleading information and sometimes, these kinds of mistaken thoughts can be used to control the whole public’s opinion.
Moreover
, in today’s society, numerous stars are getting popular by the images that they build on social
media
and
this
also
means that they can be criticized or forgotten whenever they make mistakes. In 2019, Suli, a famous Korean singer, committed suicide because of criticism from netizens.
This
case has significantly illustrated how power and freedom of
media
can affect negatively
on
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

show examples
individuals’ lives as the consequences are sometimes serious and unpredictable. To sum up,
although
the
media
brings about a wide range of benefits for humans, it is
also
dangerous;
therefore
, it should be chosen and selected carefully by both journalists and readers

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next: